Complete synopsis of LMB
Send proposal and synopsis to agent for review
Original goals were to write a synopsis for Berta and submit proposal for review. However, I've had to reevaluate this.
I surpassed my 100-page goal and actually got to page 167 before I was forced to face a serious logic flaw in the story.
No, this didn't hit me all at once: I'd "kind of" noticed it from the beginning, though I thought the way I'd written could be believable in a DUH-it's-a-paranormal! sort of way. I mean, heck, I believed it.
Of course I did. I wrote it.
Then I stopped believing it. I mean, seriously: A box, okay? The contents of which need to get back to Germany. Nobody can take it there for reasons that are quite clear in the story. The contents of the box do have certain powers and already managed to get it from one place to another (though with a bit of human assistance.) Therefore, it made perfect sense to me that the box could also make its way to Germany.
So without human help, the box shows up in Germany very mysteriously. My characters knock themselves out trying to figure out who sent it. It appears no one did...cuuuuz...it's a paranormal, right?
This nagged at me for 4 months. I discussed it with Beth, who was noncommittal.
ME: "It's a paranormal, right?????"
BETH (eyeroll): "Um, yeah...okay."
ME (thinking): "I sooo do NOT want to rewrite the whole damn thing."
Then I had lunch with another_wip.
We discuss it. I whine. She listens. I whine some more:
"Soooo....okay, what I'm worried about is this: The box GETS to Germany, okay? So the characters can find out who it belongs to." Which is the crux of that part of the story: Getting the contents of the box back to where it belongs. "SO WHY DIDN'T THE STUPID BOX JUST GO STRAIGHT WHEREVER IT REALLY WANTS TO GO?" Which of course would render my characters useless. And there would be no story.
I thought about it all day.
I woke up out of a dead sleep at 4 a.m. the next morning with one single thought in my brain: I have to rewrite the whole damn thing.
Not actually the WHOLE thing--just the stupid, unbelievable, totally contrived part about a box mysteriously FedExing itself on a transatlantic journey.
GOD, it was such an awesome idea at the time! The creepy old box showing up out of the blue. My characters' horrified reactions. Their search for an explanation, only to find none. Their realization that a dark force, indeed, was very much at work there.
Yeah, great. But even PARANORMAL has to be somehow grounded in reality. Everything has to add up, make sense in the end. I realized after much consideration that this particular plot device sucked.
The problem now is this: All that great mystery and intrigue? Gone. Which means it Must Be Replaced.
REVISED APRIL GOAL: Make it work!