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Goals Update and Reality Check

First, goals in review:

Complete revisions on proposal pages on LMB
Complete synopsis of LMB
Send proposal and synopsis to agent for review


Complete 100 pages of revisions for KND, aka Berta

Original goals were to write a synopsis for Berta and submit proposal for review. However, I've had to reevaluate this.

I surpassed my 100-page goal and actually got to page 167 before I was forced to face a serious logic flaw in the story.

No, this didn't hit me all at once: I'd "kind of" noticed it from the beginning, though I thought the way I'd written could be believable in a DUH-it's-a-paranormal! sort of way. I mean, heck, I believed it.

Of course I did. I wrote it.

Then I stopped believing it. I mean, seriously: A box, okay? The contents of which need to get back to Germany. Nobody can take it there for reasons that are quite clear in the story. The contents of the box do have certain powers and already managed to get it from one place to another (though with a bit of human assistance.) Therefore, it made perfect sense to me that the box could also make its way to Germany.

So without
human help, the box shows up in Germany very mysteriously. My characters knock themselves out trying to figure out who sent it. It appears no one did...cuuuuz...it's a paranormal, right?

This nagged at me for 4 months. I discussed it with Beth, who was noncommittal.

ME: "It's a paranormal, right?????"

BETH (eyeroll): "Um, yeah...okay."

ME (thinking): "I sooo do NOT want to rewrite the whole damn thing."

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Then I had lunch with another_wip.

We discuss it. I whine. She listens. I whine some more:

"Soooo....okay, what I'm worried about is this: The box GETS to Germany, okay? So the characters can find out who it belongs to." Which is the crux of that part of the story: Getting the contents of the box back to where it belongs. "SO WHY DIDN'T THE STUPID BOX JUST GO STRAIGHT WHEREVER IT REALLY WANTS TO GO?" Which of course would render my characters useless. And there would be no story.

Pam agreed.

I thought about it all day.

I woke up out of a dead sleep at 4 a.m. the next morning with one single thought in my brain: I have to rewrite the whole damn thing.

Not actually the WHOLE thing--just the stupid, unbelievable, totally contrived part about a box mysteriously FedExing itself on a transatlantic journey.

GOD, it was such an awesome idea at the time! The creepy old box showing up out of the blue. My characters' horrified reactions. Their search for an explanation, only to find none. Their realization that a dark force, indeed, was very much at work there.

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Yeah, great. But even PARANORMAL has to be somehow grounded in reality. Everything has to add up, make sense in the end. I realized after much consideration that this particular plot device sucked.

The problem now is this: All that great mystery and intrigue? Gone. Which means it Must Be Replaced.



( 14 comments — Leave a comment )
Apr. 4th, 2013 04:14 pm (UTC)
Well, this is a bummer, for sure. BUT, at least you realized and accepted it now and not after you were completely finished with revisions -- before you sent it off to people with super critical eyes and the ability to say yay or nay to whether it's published or not. At least you have the opportunity to re-work it now in a more sensible way and you never know, whatever solution you come up with might make you love the story even more than you already do. Perhaps there's some evil character you didn't realize was supposed to be a part of this tale.

Anyway, good luck! I hope you resolve this fast so you can get back to revising for completion!
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:19 pm (UTC)
I hope I resolved it, too. So far I've been staring at a page...for days...
Apr. 4th, 2013 04:18 pm (UTC)
Ouch!! It'll come to you in the end, but meanwhile I feel your pain.
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:20 pm (UTC)
This is bigger than both of us, lol.
Apr. 4th, 2013 05:47 pm (UTC)
You figured it out...which is part of the reason we "curb" to begin with, right? Now that you know what won't work ... I have no doubt you will find something even creeper that WILL! Go get 'em girl!

Sure do miss you. Can't wait till we can talk again (and don't forget the power of Skype) :)
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:21 pm (UTC)
Oh yeah...Skype...I MUST figure that out something!
Apr. 4th, 2013 11:18 pm (UTC)
You will make it better and better. Okay, so it's backup and regroup. Hey, you've had experience with that. That's why you're so good!
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:21 pm (UTC)
Keep telling me that, sister! :)
Apr. 5th, 2013 09:31 am (UTC)
Oh, no! I have such a love/hate relationship with realizations like this. As great as it is to realize something doesn't work sooner rather than later, it always sucks to realize it all the same. Good luck replacing it and making it work!
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:22 pm (UTC)
Thanks! It's turning into a bigger project than I'd anticipated, though...ARGH!
Apr. 12th, 2013 03:41 am (UTC)
Projects are annoyingly deceptive like that sometimes...or, erm, all the time. *eyes own projects*
Apr. 15th, 2013 02:36 pm (UTC)
And here it is, days later, and still procrastinating.
Apr. 5th, 2013 03:15 pm (UTC)
The box could get itself to Germany...but I think you'd have to explain how. It manipulated someone to take it to the airport and buy it a ticket, or some such.
Apr. 10th, 2013 03:24 pm (UTC)
I figured out how to do it. UNFORTUNATELY all the cool stuff that happened all has to be written out. I'm sunk. And stepping back for a few days. Well...till Friday, lol.
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